Reflective Essay Example

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hi okay so I’m going to take you through the example reflective essay that I wrote this is definitely a first draft I have not revised for well I haven’t proof read it I haven’t revised for voice or sentence structure or anything like that and you can see I don’t expect this from you but if you want to go crazy I wrote kind of a long one okay so hopefully this will be a good example to help you understand what the goal is for writing here now I’d like you to choose a topic that has happened like a long enough ago that you’ve had a chance to reflect on it I kind of broke that rule because I just like really kind of emotionally felt the need to write about this topic but I also did have a clear example of how I’ve reflected back since my initial reaction to what happened so I chose to write about my like the recent like the fact I recently just found out about the death of my English teacher for my senior year so this is my first draft so here’s that idea with my introduction I’ll have printed copies of these for you so you can look it over more carefully but my first paragraph in my introduction is me talking about the stranger in the village thing okay so I’m just saying there have been times in my life where I felt like a stranger in the village here’s some other experiences I’ve had with this okay and actually like when I first started teaching her I did I like hugely feel like a stranger in the village and I talked a little bit about why and then I kind of set like I used this whole paragraph here to set up on the discussion I’m going to have in my paper about feeling like a stranger in the village so I experienced a change I said sometimes you need like a major external change to cause an internal change and I had this experience last weekend so then I went back and I’m giving you guys information you need to know about who I was as a senior in high school because that’s that’s the point in which I formed the opinions about this person that I lost so I kind of go back and I paint a picture about like who I was as a student the interactions I had with this teacher told a few stories etc etc I said uh this is like still my introduction yeah you can use bad words in the essay if it’s appropriate but like don’t be a jerk about it okay so lalala you wouldn’t know I’m not gonna read this to you guys can read it on your own okay so when I get to the good part here I said okay bla bla bla bla bla these are all the experiences I had even though I thought he was a jerk lalala okay this man is still has made a still rezoning impact on the person and teacher that I am today he altered the way I think about love and reality this is why it was like falling off the planet when I found out yesterday that he committed suicide two summers ago although I have experienced death and tragedy closely too many times in my life I have never lost an adult hero so this whole piece here is like my thesis statement because it tells me it tells me it tells you as a reader how I felt and then the experience that I’m having and I’m saying like this is a new experience for me okay so I pointed out that this and I could have said specifically this made me feel like a stranger in the village and that would be fine okay but I feel like I did a good enough job in my introduction developing the idea that I’m talking about being a stranger in the village that I didn’t actually necessarily have to repeat it there in my thesis statement so you can see that it’s not until page three that I actually get to my thesis statement and that’s fine so I would just sort of like label this my thesis all right now here are my topic sentences here’s my first claimant evidence when I first found out over dinner with an old friend that an English teacher from her high school killed himself something inside of me knew it was him although my brain was still trying to dismiss it okay so this is me saying this is like the first part of the event that I’m responding to and this was my reaction like I kind of had this weird feeling like it was going to be this person I talked about later as I develop like kind of what happened at that time like I talked you through exactly what happened as I was discovering this um okay then here’s where I talk about my immediate feelings my immediate response was it was like some giant like pick me up by the neck choking the airf weight like away from me and just like slamming the face first into the cold wooden floor like it was really sad okay in shocking and so I talked about how I immediately felt at the time then in my warrant further down okay um I’m talking about here’s the part where I’m saying okay looking back on it this is how I feel now no I’m saying okay bla bla bla but I felt like really shocked and filled with grief it’s been a few days and the grief isn’t as sharp now I just feel like there’s some part of me missing I think the shock of his death is what caused some explaining why felt away is what caused the rush of sadness and a feeling of loss which is what I already described up here it was like a great stone statue of my hero was suddenly pulled down calming the pieces across the earth but now that the shock is over again now this is me right now thinking about it I just feel regretful that I can never share all the gratitude I have for him now I’m an English teacher so now I’m saying this is how we feel now okay so reflecting back I get why I felt that way and this is how I feel now okay my next topic sentence says after those first moments of shacking realization is gone anger mixed in with my feelings okay so like a few moments after I found out so this is the next part of my event this is how I felt okay I felt anger and then I described how and why I felt angry and now here is where I get to the part of my warrant where I’m reflecting back prior to that I’m just like blah blah blah this is right this is why I felt so angry bla bla bla bla and then I’m saying now looking back now I feel remorse in the pit of my stomach because of the irrational thought that somehow I could have helped but something out of everyone’s control pushed him to do this and so now looking back at my initial response now I don’t really feel angry anymore now I just feel a sense of forgiveness for him I’m just and what I’m doing right now is I’m trying to use that forgiveness to fill that empty space in my I leave it both in my heart okay so that’s the part of my warrant that’s reflecting back on how I initially reacted okay and I’m going to show you next example my next topic sentence says sadness and anger filled me with an odd sense of purpose okay so the next thing that happened was as I was sitting there rereading and staring at his picture which is this is all part of like the event this is what I felt like I felt the sense of purpose okay so that’s my final topic sentence and telling you what part of the event I’m writing about and how I felt about it okay so same thing I’m like blah blah blah this is why I reacted that way at that time or this is how I reacted at that time and here’s why I think I reacted that way this is the part of the warrant where I say this reflecting back I think I reacted that way because I wanted to make my life more in His image like as a way of bringing him back in some small way rather than put my teaching path an entirely new course I resolved to view every lesson that I get to teach a sacred especially those that remind me of Maher like this teacher right I already love being a teacher and every day I’m inspired by my students that’s you guys you guys are awesome but it’s like mayor’s death has left me reaching for a new standard I’ve always been intimidated to teach English but thinking back on each of his powerful lessons I found a new sense of confidence determination and purpose so this is me reflecting on what my initial reactions were so this is me now reflecting and how I immediately felt then okay so your warrant is two parts it’s describing me after your topic sentence stuff it’s how did I respond at that time and then it’s me reflecting on how I felt and why okay now here’s my conclusion my conclusion is kind of multifaceted yours might not be this long and that’s fine but now I kind of restate my thesis right here it happened a while ago but this is what I just found out okay this is why it was a strength this is why I was a stranger in the village and here the here the range of feelings that I discussed my essay okay so then furthermore I kind of reflect on some main ideas in my paragraph I’m sorry in my essay and here’s where I redefine what it means to be a stranger in the village and I talked about how this experience made me no longer feel like a stranger in the village in some way but kind of made me feel like a stranger in the village in another way all right I hope that makes sense again email me during class if you have any questions and we’ll be good have a wonderful day